
Witness mind
a tether down:
heavy head,
beautiful crown –
filled to the loft
with darkest fears,
shadows of hatred
muddled with tears,
vengeful thoughts
driven by pride;
nobody knows what
glories they hide.
This post was prompted by the Trifecta writing challenge: Trifextra, week eighty-four.
Amazing! This is first place material.
Whaaat? You make me blush. Thank you! I really think yours is fantastic, I just had this hilarious vision of a guy trying to pull a tooth by tying it to a rafter . . .
I mean it…yours was so amazing..blush on.
Your perception of my words is the exact reason I adore your character….optimism and comedy …beutiful character traits!
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🙂 indeed
Had to read this a couple times I thought it so good. Awesome piece Rob
Wow, really? Thanks a lot. 😀
Rob? Keep blushing. You’ve written with honour and originality. It is so full of imagery and emotion. Powerfully done.
Thank you Jo-Anne. 🙂
Nicely done, light rhyme for a hefty subject.
Thank you. 🙂
A poem that rhymes – a pleasant change. Thanks!
Hey, thank you!
This one blew me away. Read it several times. So poignant and real.
Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it. 🙂
This is great.
Thanks Draug!
Wow! Very compelling piece. Its beautiful cadence is a stark contrast to its heavy subject matter. Very well done!
Thank you, Ivy! 🙂
Nobody knows what glories they hide – that’s the (frightening) truth. Beautiful rhythm to this one…
Thanks Janna. 🙂
Really good .. the rhythm is perfect… and with great originalliity
Thanks Bjorn!
Absolutely delightful!Wish I could write like this..
Thank you. But I’m sure you write very well and with your heart, that’s what counts!
Aww that’s really very sweet of you to say,thank you Rob:-)
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Fantastic response, Rob. I’m impressed by the depth of this piece and by your creativity. Thanks for linking up. Don’t forget to vote.
Thank you. 🙂